T1+Persuade

04/04/11 - Conferenced with you today, you have done a great job here Kennedy just make sure you keep using those language resources 25/03/11 Great work - Where is your Powhiri procedure? Thisneeds to be on here by Monday so I can have a read over it.

//__ Monday 4th April 2011 __//

LI: Identify language resources and understand how to use these in our writing.

Success Criteria: In my writing I will use some:

* Synonyms * Similies, metaphors * Imperatives (command) * Rhetorical questions * Facts and data (statistics) * Strong verbs * Descriptive words e.g- adjectives, adverbs, similies and metaphors * Repetition * Exaggeration

//__ Monday 4th April 2011 __//

LI: To write a good and descriptive argument about a disaster that has happened lately, in NZ.

// Success Criteria: // // * Your reader will be hooked, and listen/read carefully if it is written well. // // * There will be lots of language resources so it will be a higher standard. // // * There will be lots of data and information to back up your point/s. // // * There will be lots of problems and then lots of solutions for the situations. //

THIS IS THE PIECE OF WRITING EDITED WITH MS STOVOLD.

I chose yellow because it was slightly hard sometimes to think of some more higher standard language vocab.

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REFLECTION: I learnt how to write a piece of argument writing and then to make it better with lots of different language resources. (with the teacher)

__// Tuesday 22nd March 2011 //__

LI: To write a good and descriptive argument about a disaster that has happened lately, in NZ.

// Success Criteria: // // * Your reader will be hooked, and listen/read carefully if it is written well. // // * There will be lots of language resources so it will be a higher standard. // // * There will be lots of data and information to back up your point/s. // // * There will be lots of problems and then lots of solutions for the situations. //

THIS IS THE FIRST DRAFT.

I chose yellow because is was sometimes difficult when I had to think of lots of problems and then to solve them, but it got easier as I went.

**//Danger in Christchurch//** **//And the population in Christchurch//**

There are lots of horrific things that have happened in the Christchurch earthquake. People and animals killed, precious buildings that have been knocked down and the whole Christchurch city is falling apart! Have you ever had someone you love or care about killed, in a natural disaster?

 From the September 2010 earthquake the population of people in Christchurch has been dropping rapidly and with the earthquake that has just happened, it is getting much worse. An earthquake is one of the worst natural disasters you can experience, especially the big 6.3 one we had in Christchurch on the 27th of February 2011.

 Lots of people that are loved and cared for have been killed in the earthquake and all of the relatives were and still are, grief-stricken. People are getting killed, being trapped under buildings, plaster and other objects. etc. And from the 2nd of March more than 161 people have been confirmed dead. Personally I think that everyone should get out of Christchurch or get out of towns and places where there are lots of buildings and glass. To go somewhere else to live or to stay for a while, because if there is another earthquake it might be bigger and more people will be in huge danger, of dying or getting trapped by buildings.

 Not only are there people getting killed but there are residents and even people from other countries that went missing, and families did not know where they were, if there is another quake and it is big and dangerous don’t you think we should keep people safe? We should keep people safe by putting big rubber pipes around things and places so if there is another disaster people could crawl into the pipes where they would be safe and out of danger, the pipes wouldn’t crumble to pieces and they would be secure. If we do this we would hopefully save the population going down.

 There is more than $16 billion dollars that is required to be payed by insurers from all the damage that has developed by the quake and all the the badly injured people have been in the hospital most of them are still in there now, and there is not enough money to look after them properly, to pay for all the equipment, because to help people survive you need the resources and tools. So there is a high risk of more people dying. Don’t you think we should raise money to send, to help them pay for more equipment?

 Do you not think we should save the people in Christchurch by getting everyone out or out of cities and towns incase there is another natural disaster? But if the people don’t want to get out of Christchurch don’t you think we should do some of these solutions so no more people get killed?

By Kennedy

REFLECTION: I learnt how to write a piece of argument writing and to think of all the problems and then to solve the problems.